Post 10: Script Writing

Task 1: Initial Ideas

Task 2: Writing your own short film script

Billy is trying to cope with his non-existent relationship with his mother and coping at school with the teachers and the uncomfortable life he is in. When it becomes too much Billy has only one area of comfort but when he hears news that changes everything will this area of comfort be enough for him to cope.

Synopsis
 A young school boy feels very alone. He does not have many friends and finds everyday a struggle. He is always alone and is trying to break out of this and trying to get noticed but he doesn't fit in. He doesn't know what to do.


Feedback of synopsis

As a group we have recorded feedback from the target audience of our short film. We have used 3 students, an art student, drama student and a photography student. We have chose these particular students as they will have more understanding about what we are trying to do and will get good feedback from them. Also we have got feedback from an adult who is also one of our target audience for a short film.


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vzS--OAwd1c


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IdwYa2pzWew


After feedback
After we had our feedback we wrote a new synopsis as a group and this is the final synopsis:
Billy a 12 year old school boy is not coping. He has an non-existent relationship with his mother and the teachers at school. His only place of comfort is sitting under one of the stairs at school. But when he hears news that changes everything, will this area of comfort for be enough to make everything seem cope able.

First draft of script

BLACK SCREEN- TITLES

Loud background noise, children talking.

HARD CUT: EXT. OUTSIDE BILLY’S HOUSE IN THE ALLEY WAY

Billy steps out of his house, walks round the corner into the alley.

LONG SHOT: EXT. TOP OF THE ALLEY WAY

Billy is walking to school on the phone to his mum.

BILLY

Why, where you going to be?

BILLY

Ok, so what time will you be home?

Billy

Oh ok then, maybe see you tomorrow then.

MUM hangs up the phone.

MEDIUM LONG SHOT: EXT ALLEY WAY

Billy is continuing to walk to school.

HARD CUT: INT. CLASSROOM

Billy runs in late and the teacher tells him off.

TEACHER

Late again Billy?

Billy puts his head down and walks to his seat.

HARD CUT: EXT: OUTSIDE CANTEEN

Billy is trying to push through the crowds.

HARD CUT: INT: UNDER THE STAIRS

Billy is looking at people walking by, he rings his mum.

BILLY

Mum, I feel ill can you come pick me up?

BILLY

But mum please, it’s horrible here.

MUM hangs up the phone.

CLOSE UP: Billy starts scratching at his wrist.

HARD CUT: EXT: QUAD

Billy is walking through the quad alone.

FREEZE FRAME: CLOSE UP ON BILLY’S FACE.

CUT TO CREDITS ON BLACK SCREEN.